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Tried to add some more “umph”. I’m sorry; that was weird. Do you like it?
This was such a chilling piece. It is an interesting perspective with thought-provoking themes. I liked the way it was written, in this first person, reflective style, and its short but sweet nature told me everything I needed to know while still maintaining an element of mystery.
The only thing that I was confused about was the timeline of the piece. It was challenging to grasp the background of this character and to understand what happened that led them to that point in their life.
You are an insanely good writer. I'm a little obsessed with this storyline. This is such an amazing short story; I wish I could write short stories as well as this. You are super talented, and I wish you well in your endeavors, and I can't wait to read more from you!