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The voice of the speaker is chillingly captivating. I am impressed with how you interlaced the words coming out of the speaker's mouth with a sense of casualness, because it smartly amplified the strength and power in the character's words. For example, the part "Ma forbade my friends from seeing me the month before I was institutionalized, so they all think I hate 'em. In reality, I might've needed them, but it's too late now" became twice as poignant because of the distant, sort-of-apathetic feel in the voice of the character. The same with the part "They help me burn bits of aluminum to throw at the alley cats and allow me to relieve myself from the wildfire of life," which became much more terrifying because of its casualness.
I personally find this story and its main character quite enthralling, and It would be great if you could transform it to a longer one. If you choose to do so, I hope to see you maintain the distinct voice of the speaker and deepen his/her back story.
Beautiful work! I hope this peer review is helpful, and I am looking forward to seeing your other works.