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My WtW Poetry Comp submission! Looking for peer reviews.
This is a highly relatable poem to me and I'm left with the feeling I've had many times of drowning, through my daydreams :)
Maybe you could add another stanza about what happens after the second? It's perfectly fine without it, but I would really love for this poem to be longer. The details are exquisite.
#5: "Cold water lapping in time with my strangled breaths " This is easy to envision, creatively descriptive, and pulls me into the scene probably more than any of the other lines.
*high five* I was a little skeptical when I saw the title because of how many poems I've seen about drowning, but this just totally blew me away. Keep writing; you have some amazing talent :DDD
Good luck in the contest! :D