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Message to Readers
Sound reverberates in a way so that if you listen closely, you can hear ghost telling you to mind your own business.
(This is part two of the "Chillax" series, stay tuned for part three)
I really love your writing! There's so much personality in the characters, and you have amazing description. I especially liked the idea of this story - dragons and magic is awesome.
I was really confused by the settings. It wasn't really said anywhere when and where the story is taking place, and it doesn't help that sometimes there's horses and sometimes modern-era phones and media. The first person perspective is also a little jarring because I didn't really know if the perspective was changing with the setting, or if it was the same character.
Congrats on winning the contest!