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Message to Readers
someone tell me to stop this gay bullshit
The celestial references and the way the writer always tied things back to love and the night sky were beautifully interwoven. It reminds me of the way I am capable of feeling about someone, the way I did feel once, and as bittersweet as the piece pretends to be, it never fails to come back to a pure and content understanding of the most inexplicable thing in any galaxy: love.
Honestly? this is so beautiful. I'd hardly change a thing. maybe split the third stanza into three lines that better connect with "astraea and the power of bare feet" and another that compares the harshness of the declaration about loving the stars to the gentleness that could be love instead.
I keep forgetting to stay caught up with Escapril, so thank you for reminding me (and bringing me close to tears)