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As a whole, this poem gives me a sense of wistfulness as if I knew each of these boys myself or if I wish I knew them better. At the end, I'm left with a sense of wonder at these boys and what they endure and how they can still triumph every day. I do wish that the last two lines could have a translation or at least some English to give the reader a better idea of what it means.
I would like to see some more experimentation or variance in language. You use similes and sensory details often, but you do it quite well! They give me a great sense of the vivid pictures you want to bring out. Variance in these techniques could paint an even more vivid image of each person, and it could avoid monotony in the way you use language.
There are so many parts of this poem that have amazing crafting/language, but my favorite lines(!) are "To the Guatemalan boys who work the night shift at the taco shack with the blue roof downtown / and who come to school late or not at all". I love how this is a simple statement but still encompasses all the themes of this poem: hope and hopelessness, wistfulness, and youth.
You did an amazing job with characterization on this! I left a note about Juan, but all of the other boys have depth that leaves me feeling like I know them well but I still want to know more about them. It would be great if you could keep working on fixing some parts that are a little confusing by making sure the reader knows why those details are important (see notes), but this is already a very strong draft in my opinion.
Great job on this! I loved the unique portraits of each person you created as well as how personal this poem sounds. You have a great control of language, and imagery especially is very vivid here. Keep writing!!