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Hi guys, interested to know what everyone's thoughts are on veganism and if there are any other vegans out there? Thanks Lucy :)
The beginning on how you wrote about your brothers getting diagnosed. Hearing that made me want to read the rest, to hear what you were trying to say.
Being vegan. and how you are vegan because of compassion(etc,.). You were very strong in your stance and tone, still being kind and not harsh about it, but still being firm and knowing that this is right for you.
Your confidence that you are vegan for the right reasons. I also really loved the quotes you ended with on the paragraphs.
I think it's good. You're very convincing!
I thought so. There were a few places where I felt a tad confused(e.g."and is flown to hospital 4 hours away for 2 weeks, you question why and how". I had to read over that twice to get it. I'm not exactly sure how to re-word that, but maybe you do?)
I think it's great! Your sentence structure is formed nicely so it flows. Your argument was strong and convincing, and you got your point across in an amazing way!
I'm not that big on vegan-ism, so when I saw that title, I thought I kind of was like, "Sure. Why not?" I'm glad I read it.
Your tone and words used are powerful and strong, holding firm against the opposing view. I love the quotes you used that supported your stated argument. You gave a very great insight on why you are vegan and why you would like others to become vegan.
And though I'm not vegan, you gave me something to think about.
Amazing job! I'm looking forward to reading more of your work!