Peer Review by _spacecadet_ (United States)

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April Showers

By: Isla-Grace Davies


A brief ice shower to start the month
It's a fleeting glance at panic,
Just one short meltdown and then back
To Busy and Smiling and Manic.

And hail is whispering close now,
I’ve forgotten my umbrella,
Duck under candy plastic sheets
To postpone a minute dilemma.

Ensure I stay out of the way,
Stick to my neon galaxy,
I’ve already nailed pathetic,
Won’t someone please fetch me fallacy?


Peer Review

I am shaken to the core. This poem is beautiful and I love it so very much. Thank you for this.


You could use similes


"I've forgotten my umbrella, duck under candy plastic sheets" It's almost child-like and it sounds like a dream. I also like "stick to my neon galaxy" It reminds me of Guardians of the Galaxy.


PLEASE KEEP WRITING YOU ARE SO GOOD AND SO TALENTED I WOULD LOVE TO READ MORE


Reviewer Comments

This is a beautiful interpretation of April showers