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I am shaken to the core. This poem is beautiful and I love it so very much. Thank you for this.
You could use similes
"I've forgotten my umbrella, duck under candy plastic sheets" It's almost child-like and it sounds like a dream. I also like "stick to my neon galaxy" It reminds me of Guardians of the Galaxy.
PLEASE KEEP WRITING YOU ARE SO GOOD AND SO TALENTED I WOULD LOVE TO READ MORE
This is a beautiful interpretation of April showers