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Personally a sense of longing just through reflection from the main character.
One thing that may be helpful for this piece is set metres between the lines. I think if you’re going for the legend like ballad in this piece I’d go all out but that’s just me. ;D
*This stanza is the my absolute favourite it just has a feeling of authenticity like it’s been pulled straight out of GoT or something 😂
This poem just has a feel of an old legend and I love it. Feels like home for me-full of legends- so I love it.
As great as ever :D