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Any feedback much welcome
I think that the girl leaves her hair ribbon on the dresser is the most revealing detail. It shows that although she may seem brusque or uncaring by not saying goodbye, she really cares for her friend, and is considerate enough to leave a memento of herself for her friend to remember her by, until she returns.
I would like to know why the girl always has to leave, and where she leaves to. It sounds almost as if she is running away from home, stays away awhile, then returns when she discovers that she is not better off on her own. Maybe she struggles to make out what she wants to do or who she wants to be. Am I close?
Good day, Hailey.
Thank you for sharing your character with us. I am curious to know more about her. Did you think her up for the prompt, or is she character from another work of yours?
I am glad you liked my piece, "After We Do"; you are welcome to all my other pieces as well. I also saw your response to the "After" prompt. Just a friendly note: a quiet request entices me much more to review a piece than a demand . . . maybe you would like to alter your message to readers on that piece?
Thank you for sharing your work with us, and happy future reading and writing, Hailey.