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Phoebe L

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please, talk to me about dad rock.

Message to Readers

I have a hard time with rhyming and making the words flow with each other. There are a lot of words that I love and want to put in my writing, but I can never tell if they fit well or stick out. So any feedback on that would be great :)


March 5, 2015

PROMPT: Floating


Up until high school

I lived in a fishbowl

Its glossy surface reflecting

a goofy, clueless face back to me.

It wasn't until reality

sunk its sleazy realiteeth

Into the solid crystal bubble

I used to call my home.


My shell sank to the bottom of the ocean

and I found out these creamy halcyon seas

aren't all they're cracked up to be.


Schools of prismatic fish

with beautiful fins and interesting tales

Swim through the channels with ease

while I d





in them.


I found out that floating solo

is all fun and games

until you come up for air

and there are no lifesavers

for miles.



Starting high school was rough for me, which is what this is about. Any feedback is appreciated :)


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