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asteria

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don't settle for the mundane;

chaos is far more intriguing.

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constructive criticism/comments welcome. any suggestions for better imagery?
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don't touch a monster you won't love

March 23, 2019

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they warned him of her
and those
rosebush hands,
and those
moonlight eyes,
and those
swaying hips.

they warned him of her
and everything
she touched,
and everything
that made her smile.

and they say he once wondered
what could make her so
dangerous, 
her
and those
pomegranate lips.

but i think he liked the ignorance.

why else would he
bare his neck to me
and my
bloodied fangs?
~asteria

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7 Comments
  • r|A|i|N

    holy hell


    5 months ago
  • asteria

    thank youuu! means a lot!!!!


    6 months ago
  • Julius Caesar

    damn!!!!!!! this is so good!!!!!!!!! i could feel that in my gut!


    6 months ago
  • asteria

    thank you!


    6 months ago
  • Onion3102

    I love your descriptions!


    6 months ago
  • asteria

    idk paperbird, but i'll take the compliment :)

    i guess i do have a tip, though. use nouns to describe other nouns in an unconventional way. it doesn't work for everything, but for example: "pomegranate lips" and "rosebush hands." ummmm another one: "honeycomb hair." also, alliteration is GOLDEN.


    6 months ago
  • paperbird

    how are you so good


    6 months ago