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The title caught my eye. When I read the first paragraph, the use of strong words and valid points made me read on.
Kids shouldn't get participation trophies.
The fact that the writer included that being a gracious loser will make kids humble winners made me agree with the writer. If kids don't know how to lose, they won't know how to win.
The writer could've used more sources.
The paper was written very smoothly. All the paragraphs line up well. It doesn't jump around.
Keep up the good work. This paper was excellent and very interesting.
Next time you write a paper like this, show the other side of the problem.