Yellow Bruises

By: Bi

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Her limbs grew in a yellow hue
No longer pose in purple grace

Another week without you

The yellow stains in her leg
Come to fight the purple dread
With the small reminder that love
Is more than being a stained rag

Has it really been a week?

Peer Review

What about this piece delighted, surprised, or moved you?

I love the message behind the poem. It's wonderfully written with the use of imagery and internal thoughts.

What else would you like to know? Where might the writer deepen an idea or question? Would additional details invite you further into the writing?

I would love extra parts to this poem. Maybe a poem from before and afterwards? It could be a series :)

Reviewer Comments

Keep writing! Poetry is really hard to get right and you're managing to do some really good work. Just keep channelling your emotions to write and you'll get so much better!!