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I love the message behind the poem. It's wonderfully written with the use of imagery and internal thoughts.
I would love extra parts to this poem. Maybe a poem from before and afterwards? It could be a series :)
Keep writing! Poetry is really hard to get right and you're managing to do some really good work. Just keep channelling your emotions to write and you'll get so much better!!