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I loved how you capitalized the fist letter of the words that really matter in your piece. It makes your writing different and more exciting to read.
I got to be honest with you this is a pretty straight forward beautiful piece just continue to use captivating words that suck the readers into your writing and keep being awesome!
I love this piece it was literally heart wrenching! BTW I am a Ravenclaw and I love HP tooooo! I'm also a Thunderbird in Ilvermorny.