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asteria

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kind of trying a different style.
any feedback is appreciated :)

lacerations

March 15, 2019

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you
are a vase.
a shattered vase.
shards of
painted glass
lie scattered
across your life
and impale those
who dare 
sit too close.
(of course i understand)
the delicate knives
built around you
have taught people
to shy away.
who would
step on
all this glass
for me
? you cry.
(do you not see yourself?)
but oh, my love,
i will use
your sweet words as
my protection,
i will use
your burning heart as
my incentive,
i will use
your soft touch as
my defense.
(how could i be so blind?)
and when you
finally see me
at your side,
you will 
stitch up the 
parts of me
i could not
protect.
(i expected too much)
and i will
see that you
were worth
every scar.
(i deserved better)
~asteria

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4 Comments
  • asteria

    thank you for the feedback fatpanda!


    4 days ago
  • fatpanda

    ooh this style definitely works, though it will be a lot easier to read if there were separate paragraphs. the thought of the poem is amazing, and i like the way you used your metaphors. great play on words!


    4 days ago
  • asteria

    ahhh thank you!!


    7 days ago
  • loveletterstosappho

    this is such a painfully relatable poem and it's crafted masterfully. i love the usage of the parentheses and boldface in contrast with the normal text. wonderful work! keep writing!!


    7 days ago