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I really liked the message and I think you're right on!
I think to help your poem be even stronger, would be to add punctuation, you know, commas, periods, questions marks, those would really help your questions and sentences have stronger definition, which leads to stronger impact. Also, to help your stanzas be stronger, I'd recommend adding spaces between each new beginning to give it definition and help your new lines be stronger. When it all runs together it loses some of its impact.
I thought the poem was really good, but adding punctuation and spacing between the stanzas will really make it so much stronger and it will have a greater impact on the reader.