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Here is my final submission! This topic is so important and dear to me and I really hope it means something to you.
Starting the piece with your own life experiences is an effective way of making the readers hooked on to the piece.
The writer strives to convince people to adopt kids from the foster system and appeals for support towards same-sex couples who adopt kids.
The way the writer has used her own life experiences and emotions hit home the hardest.
The writer could add on more about how one can help solve the 'adoption crisis'.
The competition has now ended so I'm pretty late reviewing the op-ed, but I just want you to know that you've written an amazing piece!
This is a really great piece. The topic that you've taken up, as well as the way you've gone about it, is really good.
All the very best for your writing!