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CONTEST WINNERS!!! #supposedtobe

March 13, 2019

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Thank you to every single amazing writer who participated in my contest! I had such a hard time choosing winners :P Guess what? You all win and I'll be coming around to like at least 2 of your pieces as soon as I can <3

Hugs all round!
\(^o^)/

Specifically, here are the prizes and winners for each category! Congratulations to you all <3
(just comment which pieces you want me to review)

= EVERYONE =
I'll like at least 2 pieces for each and every one of you fantabulous writers!!

= 1ST PLACE =
  • follow
  • 4 reviews (your choice)
  • 3 likes
  • 2 comments

one line: Opal Drop 'Plucked to Curve'
https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/103760/version/196602

You cruel strategist, you think you can outthink me, you think I can be plucked to curve to your will?

Opal Drop, I loved how you presented your one line as dialogue! This was such a witty and creative interpretation of the line 'plucked to curve', and I can really hear the malice and dry humour of this line. Furthermore, the irony of the speaker being able to identify the flaws in the plans of this "cruel strategist" creates even more folds in the plot - fantastic work!

poetry: N. 'Cruel'
https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/103238/version/195633

N, I loved your poem so much and managing to express your thoughts and descriptions in a mere 12 lines definitely came as a surprise. The line "with false tears and lunar moods" really reflects many people I know and I think it was really amazing that you could personify Cruelty in such a way. Just wow!

short story: symphonyrain0812 '#Supposedtobe'
https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/104653/version/198578

Symphony, your piece was so well developed with a significant build up to a heart-wrenching twist at the end. I especially loved your descriptions of "the mellifluous twinkle of a choir" and "the synchronised chorus of adoration" -- your piece was eloquent and succinct in its own way, encapsulating all the elements of a winning short story!

= 2ND PLACE =
  • follow
  • 3 reviews (your choice)
  • 3 likes
  • 2 comments

one line: Johanna 'Like a Sigh'
https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/103900/version/196919

He fell off the edge of his world, tendrils of darkness reaching for him, and his thump, thump, thumping of a heartbeat the rhythm of the rain; the storm that pours down his chiseled face- he fell, and fell, his last breath blossoming out of his lungs like a sigh- decorated with glitter and sparkles.

Johanna, the imagery in your line was astounding and I especially loved the description of his breath "blossoming out of his lungs" and the heartbeat that reflected "the rhythm of the rain", encasing the reader in a sense of almost-calm; a helplessness but also acceptance at the same time. Love it!

poetry: Aminah McBina 'More Than What Meets The Eye'
https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/103231/version/195616

Mina, your poem really struck at me and made me stop to think about how we really do push our feelings and flaws inside. Not only was your piece thought provoking, but revealed a sense of reality and wisdom within itself, so amazing work! I particularly loved how you ended with a half-rhyme to really solidify your piece and create a sense of finality.

short story: weirdo 'Death Parade'
https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/103727/version/196619

Weirdo, thank you so so much for being super involved in my contest and entering in all the categories!! Your piece really made my heart hurt and your creative take on the line "faces that are guilt-free" was really amazing to read. The use of dialogue and internal thoughts/questions throughout your piece made it a really interesting and thought-provoking read - awesome job!

= 3RD PLACE =
  • follow
  • 2 reviews (your choice)
  • 3 likes
  • 2 comments

one line: Project: Voices 'Unmute'
https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/104031/version/197235

Every witness was trying to speak up, but the megaphone only lies inside his heart, never once used to amplify his voice, but always to echo grudges within his chest; loud waves were bouncing off from chamber to chamber — trying to escape, but there was no convenient way out — up till he turned to himself and asked, "Until when can we savor silence behind the noise I think we often hear; until when can we savor the blindness behind the sight of wrongs I think we often see?”

Woah -- Project: Voices, this is the second longest sentence I have ever seen (the first being from the novel 'Fly Away Peter' by David Malouf that lasts for ~ one page)! I'm amazed that you managed to write such a long sentence with descriptions that are not clunky at all and continue to flow eloquently - I particularly loved the phrase 'loud waves were bouncing off from chamber to chamber'. 

poetry: Christy Wisdom 'Trust'
https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/103091/version/195370

Christy, I really loved the structure and flow of your poem that slowly built a backstory and progressed in a way that made me want to keep reading! Your repetition of the speaker's thoughts and emotions really solidified and emphasised your message of betrayal - keep up the great writing!

short story: Ursa Rover 'The Stage'
https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/103763/version/196625

Ursa Rover, this was such an amazing piece that really immersed me into your character's point of view. I loved how your writing shifted from the external to the internal by playing with italics and the distinction between the crowd, the MC and the actor. Your literal take of the line "of make up and deception" was so fluid in description and was a joy to read!

= HONOURABLE MENTIONS =
  • 1 review (my choice)
  • 3 likes
  • 2 comments

one line: CuriosityKilledTheCat 'REAL'
https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/103766/version/196617

"Being yourself is SO important," someone states as we continue covering up our personalities with glitter and sparkles.

Curiosity, there is a sense of ambiguity in this sentence, as the reader does not know who spoke or why the people involved are covering their personalities, but this mystery adds to the sarcasm of the piece really well! I loved the irony of your line and how it demonstrates human oblivion to their own artificiality - awesome work!

Here are a list of (and hyperlinks to) all the fabulous entrants and their pieces:
Lissie
Tears #supposedtobe

weirdo
Death Parade #supposedtobe
and
The Me That Isn't Me #supposedtobe
and
Hide #supposedtobe

symphonyrain0812
#Supposedtobe

Project: Voices
unmute | #supposedtobe

Opal Drop 
Plucked to Curve #supposedtobe

Johanna
Like a sigh #supposedtobe
and
#supposedtobe

CuriosityKilledTheCat
REAL #supposedtobe

Ursa Rover
The Stage #supposedtobe

AminahMcBina
More Than What Meets The Eye | #supposedtobe

N.
Cruel #supposedtobe

Opal Drop 
Faux #supposedtobe

Dmoral13
Frowns #supposedtobe

Blotted Ink with a Broken Quill
#supposedtobe Ask and you shall be answered with only but the thing you have wished not to hear, for there are an infinite possibility of other things to be what is rather than what you want.

Christy Wisdom
#supposedtobe Trust

Thanks so much and heaps of love to you all <3

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7 Comments
  • Christy Wisdom

    Thanks so much! Can you review my pieces "the warrior's grave" and "my heart's screaming for you but you're already gone."? Thanks a bunch!


    6 days ago
  • N.

    Thank you so much! I loved the prompt, it helped me turn a handful of words in a Word Doc into a poem ;) For reviews, I'd definitely appreciate some of my "Bad Idea" parts being reviewed. Could you review the first two please? There's also a piece titled "Broken Mug" that I'd like advice on. I don't mind what the fourth one is, sorry for that *ultimate* pressure. Once again, thank you, and congratulations to everyone else!


    6 days ago
  • Ursa Rover

    Thank you! What a great contest, and such a fun prompt with which to work. The pieces I would like reviewed are Rainy Skyscrapers (it's off of a flash-fiction prompt, I don't know if you're a member or not) and A Bloody Sunday Afternoon. Thank you!


    6 days ago
  • Opal Drop

    Thank you so much!!! I'm so glad I placed! The only request I have is if you could review my piece the Deep Hearts of our Teachers, and The Symphony Raging? Thank you so much again.


    8 days ago
  • Dmoral13

    Great contest


    8 days ago
  • weirdo

    Thx so much! This was a really fun contest, although I think of might've over did it with my amount of entries.
    As for the reviews, I honestly don't care much. Just review whichever ones you want!


    8 days ago
  • CuriosityKilledTheCat

    Congratulations to all the winners (everyone's piece was freaking amazing!!)!!!
    And thanks so much for hosting such an epic contest!! :DDD


    8 days ago