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"Was it the dark circles under her weary eyes, her mop of untidy coal black hair." This really set an image of her in my head, giving her a deeper sense of character.
Solitude. Crushed hope. Poor Monday!
How did you come up with this brilliant idea?!
Beautiful! Detailed in delicate verbs and intricate adjectives, full of wonderful words, and loaded with a creative and colorful idea. I really loved your piece, Caitlyn! Your unique amazing-ness in your writing stuns me every time.
I really enjoyed how it was all in one paragraph, but perhaps splitting it into two or more might help the welcoming appearance(e.g....eagerness to start the day———She wanted to be able...)?
I hope to continue reading your gorgeous pieces! Keep writing—you're amazing!