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Hello! I'd love any comments, ideas or advice on this piece and all is appreciated. I hope you enjoy my piece and thank you for reading!
I like how you gave a background about yourself in the introduction. It gives the reader more of a connection to the piece. I've have always wondered the same question that twins inevitably are asked, "do you like being a twin?" As someone who knows a few pairs of twins, it is interesting to find out what your opinion was on having a twin.
The main argument here is that having a twin can be fun with only a few minor disadvantages such as parties and stereotypes. If you don't think about the negative things often, there will be hardly any to think of.
I like your use of emotion and especially how you ended with, "I love my wonderful twin sister, because she is actually what I'm passionate about." It gave me a sense of how close you felt to each other. I also like your use of humor and definition of a "ten minute tidy up" because it was a specific experience you've had.
I would have taken out the part in your introduction that your piece could have led to boredom. I thoroughly enjoyed it and was not bored. I believe that taking that out will make the piece stronger instead of you telling the reader they could become bored. In addition, while the use of statistics may be hard to incorporate here, maybe you could add a statistic about how many people like having a twin if possible. Quotes from other twins may also convince me further.
I would add more paragraph breaks or add transitions between paragraphs so there are clear reasons for the advantages and disadvantages of twins. There is also no clear conclusion even though you wrapped up the piece nicely. You have a lot of good evidence of why having a twin would not work out so well, but also things you enjoy doing together.
You have a great piece of writing! Just remember to check over your piece for style and grammar. I would only fix a few things because your writing is already very great. Fixing mistakes to an already great piece of writing will be of hardly any trouble!
I found some sentences that I have highlighted that were worded a tad confusing. Maybe you could make them easier to understand. You have a great piece of writing that explains both sides of the argument, very strong!