Peer Review by Vani Desabhotla (United States)

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Angry

By: BluMoon


FREE WRITING

I am angry with the men who think they're always right. 
I am angry with the women who judge and sneer and whisper out of spite. 

I am angry with the boys who think sports make them a man. 
I am angry with the girls who hurt each other because they can. 

I am angry with the people who pretend it's not their problem. 
I am angry with the system that keeps the poor on the bottom. 

I am angry with the parties teaching children to fill themselves with sex and smoke. 
I am angry with the televisions and their impossibly perfect joke. 

I am angry with the intolerants teaching hate instead of love. 
I am angry with the priests claiming their hate is from above. 

I am angry with the wars and the death that they bring. 
I am angry with the chaos that we claim is not our doing. 

I am angry with the weapons and the oceans they fill with blood. 
I am angry with the religions being dragged through the mud. 

I am angry with the fear of innocent mothers for their children. 
I am angry with the homes destroyed by the million.

I am angry with the starvation when there's plenty to go around. 
I am sad. 
Because my words do not make a sound. 

Why are you angry? 

Peer Review

"I am sad/Because my words do not make a sound"...it's just a beautiful way to end your poem!! I absolutely love it.


I'm left with a nostalgia that makes me wish that I was young again and didn't know how messed up the world was.


What was the spark that made you write down your frustrations with the world?


Reviewer Comments

I LOVE this piece, its so true and doesn't gloss over anything, which makes it beautiful! The only line that I would suggest changing is the line about the fear of innocent mothers for their children...I wasn't exactly sure on what you meant there. But other than that, awesome job!!!! :)