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Message to Readers
This is my first competition piece so any feedback would be great! This piece is kinda like my earlier one, Guns and Roses, so I hope you guys like it!
Hello, Madelyn. I was really drawn into the op-ed by the very title itself; the count of people made me ponder, until of course, my eyes flashed on the part referring to gun violence.
Having read a lot about the Florida Parkland Shooting in many of the Indian National Dailies, I firmly believe that gun violence is objectionable and you have my praise for the wonderful op-ed that you've written regarding the same.
The way you've used Statistics to support your arguement is highly compelling because it is not easy to always arrive at the right stats. A lot of research goes into this and it is reflected in the way you've drafted the op-ed.
Upon reading, the op-ed seems complete to me. As I mentioned earlier, you've done a good research, so it is really difficult to find any loopholes.
The message to readers states that this is your first competitive piece. However, your piece strikes to me as that of a Pro.
I believe you have a knack for this and should keep going on.
The op-ed has drawn me and as I go on reading, I feel this connect between the piece and myself.