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Message to Readers
had to fix a repetition
This piece offered a new perspective on human nature, it was breathtaking with all of the little details of the rain and those falling under it. Special emphasis is placed on words that enhance the imagery and atmosphere of the scene. I love how the leaf connects with the homeless man, it is such a real moment that you shed light on, really great work!
The story is filled with great imagery and themes expressed beautifully through rain and wind, that I suggest further enhancing the scene, when the character is walking down the street in the beginning, to focus on that aspect of rain or wind. As it could serve as great opening lines to sooth into the rest of the piece. I also suggest possibly having multiple crowds walking right next to the man, ignoring him and brushing him off. Maybe to give off more of an emotional tone. Either way, feel free to use these.
I really enjoyed this piece, it was emotional and thought-provoking. Many elements were blended together to create such a visual experience that stuck and spoke with me. The piece flowed really well as well. The title itself really got me to think after reading this story,t this will continue to be a memorable experience to me, thanks!