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Chapter 2 of my novel. Check out my page for more! I know I have a lot to fix, but I'd love some advice on what to focus on/my biggest weaknesses.
I loved the different personalities for each person. You were right that your writing is characterized by strong descriptions.:)
I'd like to know a bit more about Jane's past, but maybe you're saving that for later chapters.
Great job on this, but remember to break it into paragraphs and to indent them. Otherwise, I'm really enjoying this so far!