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i couldn't help myself. i indulged myself in thyon nero too much to be free of his influence, even in writing.
edit: special thanks to loveletterstosappho for pointing out a mistake in the last version
I love how poetic this piece is. Even though you write it in story-form, your attention to the important details are spectacular; I wish I could write with as beautiful of imagery as you weave into your writing. Also, I'm a huge Greek Mythology fan and caught most of your references. I love tying mythologies into my work, and you do it very well.
So, I'm assuming that the "they" you repeatedly mention in paragraphs one through three are the gospels? Whomever they are, they seem to be forgotten after we meet the character Cyrus. Do not "they" want something ("their gifts returned threefold"?) from Aurelia/Aeronwen. Is it that Cyrus frees Aurelia/Aeronwen from their service by moving her to Kyrie? Or do they just grow old and forget? It kind of seems that they are forgotten after we meet Cyrus, like I said earlier. Perhaps in the end (like the part you put in the footnotes) you could explain that further.
I hope this was the piece you wanted me to review!