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Message to Readers
oof writer's block can't stop the gay
edit: no time to write, as much as ghostlyglory is an inspiration to me, assessments are coming up but i still want to enter. pls accept this sapphic poem, it kind of incorporates both prompts?
I'm surprised about the use of another language, and I love it! Your use of German makes this piece special, unique, and adds to the piece beautifully. I love how strong and powerful this is, pulling at emotions a reader can't help but address. My favorite part about it all is how you start off strong with the title, hinting how sentimental this piece will be. After translating all the lines, I better understand this piece and think it fits perfectly with what you've written. In addition, sometimes you don't even know what someone's saying in another language because it sounds so beautiful. I couldn't hear it being spoken, but reading it all together it looks gorgeous and part of me didn't want to translate it. But curiosity won!
When you say, translate to the 'rough' meaning, are you saying there's a better one you want to go by? I think you should add that somewhere, like in the footnotes or something, about the real translations you want to express.
Love this piece!