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The theme is amazing! The original phrases used to describe it are so beautiful! I love your line "but then it's just not what I see when I'm lying awake trying to take what I can before time runs out". I think many people can relate to that feeling, of feeling like you're living someone else's life, or dream, and you just want out.
I'm partial to happy endings, but I guess this really shouldn't get one, since the theme is so relatable and really doesn't have a happy ending in real life.
Your thoughts, so original, ( and they rhyme, which is awesome!:) is so powerful and anyone, no matter where they come from will be thinking over their own life while reading this, trying to see if they are living their dream, or just living off someone else's. Great job on this! Looking forward to reviewing more of your work!