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Johanna

Singapore

We're all made of stardust.
Go check out my piece "Old Bio" if you want to see a proper bio
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Message from Writer

"Do not watch yourself with other people's eyes! You are not them; you are YOU."

"He who does not understand your silence will probably not understand your words."
– Elbert Hubbard

“Quotation is a serviceable substitute for wit.”
– Oscar Wilde

#supposedtobe

February 17, 2019

FREE WRITING

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To think that
you captivated me 
with your smirk of a smile 
and the way your eyes swirl 
like an ocean, a pool 
of blue and turquoise and grey 
the ridiculousness of it all
they say ignorance 
is bliss- but alas 
I fell for your trap 
like a moth to the moon 
like a bee to honey 
oh, sweet, sweet bliss 
I do not have your blessing. 
You are a good actor,
my once upon a lover
I drowned in nectar
blind to your façade
with words as fake, darling
with words as fake.
This is the qualified version :P

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4 Comments
  • The Bubbling Pen

    Like I commented on your previous entry of this piece, I really love the way you draw the reader in, best of luck for my contest <3


    4 months ago
  • Flaw

    This is really nice, I liked the imagery that you used. However, it would be a bit better if you added more commas, periods, and other punctuation marks to make this easier to read. It also helps to let the reader know when to pause or stop. :)


    5 months ago
  • Zoe

    Just wow! The imagery in this is phenomenal and it hit me hard! Amazing work :)


    5 months ago
  • weirdo

    You wanna know something? You make my poem that I entered look pitiful.
    I love this so much! It's really beautiful and I love the figurative language!!!


    5 months ago