MimiChoudhury

India

Hey
I've been named Swastika but please call me Mimi
I don't know why people tend to set such biggg names to small kids!!
|Fangirl|
Slytherdor
Mortal Instruments
Die-hard Twilight hater(sorry there Twi-hards. But I respect your opinion as well)

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June 29, 2020

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I was skipping up and down the broken lane. Today....today would be the day....

I could already hear his wonderful musical voice from there. His gentle warm hands, touching my blonde hair , rechristening all those memories that we had left years before. But now, it was time to give them a new name.

My happiness knew no bounds , when I found out his address from Sarah. Tears had welled up my eyes, as I thanked her profusely and set out to surprise him. I could already see his blue eyes gaping at me in wonder and excitement.

Today I  would tell what I could not tell five years earlier.

My heart began fluttering when I reached the iron gate of his house. The moment...the moment....

Trring !!Trring!!!

I looked up hopefully to see his awestruck eyes looking at me in wonder and excitement, but saw a sickly looking woman looking down at me curiously.
"What do you want??"
"Can i see Mr. Thomas Pattinson??"

Suddenly a shadow of grief came over her already sickly face as she said ,
"Oh...but I am so sorry to say ...he 's no more madam. Yes....died suddenly ....used to mumble about not able to tell a girl something all his life......"

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34 Comments
  • happygiggles

    The ending of this really broke me, it's so sad and painful but so powerful!


    about 1 month ago
  • black_and_red_ink

    Powerful ending. Wow.


    about 1 month ago
  • V-Rose

    I just submitted a review for this piece.


    about 1 month ago
  • Lone Wolf

    *loud sniffling* N-no, I'm not crying, you're crying! It's so heartbreaking but so well-written <333


    about 2 months ago
  • Sanjana Sunilkumar

    Can't stop crying


    2 months ago
  • ReaganMarie2024

    Oh my word, this is the saddest thing I've ever read. Amazing job though, I this


    2 months ago
  • Klaiir

    This broke my heart. So creative...you certainly deserved that win. Congratulations!!!


    3 months ago
  • Jothsimar

    This text certainly fits in prompt 3! I love this piece as it has so much emotion packed and the sudden change of the emotion in the storyline is gorgeous!


    4 months ago
  • Hailie Ogden

    so sad! im crying!


    4 months ago
  • Tushar Mandhan

    #Writersperception contest result out! Go and check.


    7 months ago
  • Deleted User

    I love this! I've read it before but I love it so much!


    7 months ago
  • Catlover

    Short but meaningful. Limited but at the same time boundless. I LOVE it!


    8 months ago
  • MimiChoudhury

    Thk uuu so much. Thats a great honour


    8 months ago
  • Anna_19

    im at a loss for words, and that doesnt happen very often


    8 months ago
  • New York_dreamer

    so heartbreaking!!!! I just love it when a writer can stir up such emotion in such few words :) I'd love to see you add a part to how your character reacts to the sudden news. Other than that, what a wonderful piece! :)


    8 months ago
  • Miss_S_wise

    Words can't describe how you managed to paint heartbreak in such few words!! I loved it!


    8 months ago
  • bambiamby

    Oh my, i can’t believe i’m only reading this now! This is so heartbreakingly good! (I can’t find words to describe what i’m feeling now) what a twist!


    8 months ago
  • aditi

    Wow I love cliffhangers!
    This was great! And I love the title


    9 months ago
  • ajamwal

    ooh, i want to know more


    9 months ago
  • Lovegood_24

    To echo what has been previously said, this is really good. I love how there is a plot twist!


    about 1 year ago
  • Saki

    I like how the writing keeps its pace. It's so clear and to the point. I also found rhymes within the lines, very nice, though dunno if that was intended, instinctive, or coincidental.


    over 1 year ago
  • rubywriter2004

    This is really good
    :)


    over 1 year ago
  • Jae

    wow, this is really sad, and amazingly written at the same time. great work
    :D


    over 1 year ago
  • Elizabeth Chancey

    Amazing.... beautiful... Heartbreakingly amazing.


    over 1 year ago
  • RNE

    this is so well written. that last sentence killed me!!


    over 1 year ago
  • buddingauthor

    Oh wow this is so beautiful yet sad. Great job.


    over 1 year ago
  • spearmint

    You got the plot twist. This was so beautiful and sad!! The last sentence...


    over 1 year ago
  • MimiChoudhury

    ;D


    over 1 year ago
  • xXlunagirlXx

    Awww... I'm getting goosebumps, I really hope this is just a figment of your imagination, or I shall die of asphyxiation.


    over 1 year ago
  • MimiChoudhury

    Thanks so much all of you . That means a lot. Actually...i planned to gv it a happy ending...but i changed my mind at the last second....thought of gving it a plot twist.


    over 1 year ago
  • Kahasai

    Oh, so sad, but so well written. To repeat what everyone else has already said.


    over 1 year ago
  • Ryder

    oh...such a tragedy........;-;


    over 1 year ago
  • Ursa

    aw so sad:(
    good job.


    over 1 year ago
  • Quille

    That's really sad :( Very well-written, but heartbreaking.


    over 1 year ago