MimiChoudhury

India

Broken
Broken like the new China Vase lying on the sheath
Broken like my heart
Broken like my soul

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M working on a booookkkkkkkk...hope i can finish writing this one

Why I Don't celebrate Valentine's day

December 2, 2019

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I was skipping up and down the broken lane. Today....today would be the day....

I could already hear his wonderful musical voice from there. His gentle warm hands, touching my blonde hair , rechristening all those memories that we had left years before. But now, it was time to give them a new name.

My happiness knew no bounds , when I found out his address from Sarah. Tears had welled up my eyes, as I thanked her profusely and set out to surprise him. I could already see his blue eyes gaping at me in wonder and excitement.

Today I  would tell what I could not tell five years earlier.

My heart began fluttering when I reached the iron gate of his house. The moment...the moment....

Trring !!Trring!!!

I looked up hopefully to see his awestruck eyes looking at me in wonder and excitement, but saw a sickly looking woman looking down at me curiously.
"What do you want??"
"Can i see Mr. Thomas Pattinson??"

Suddenly a shadow of grief came over her already sickly face as she said ,
"Oh...but I am so sorry to say ...he 's no more madam. Yes....died suddenly ....used to mumble about not able to tell a girl something all his life......"

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17 Comments
  • aditi

    Wow I love cliffhangers!
    This was great! And I love the title


    15 days ago
  • ajamwal ꒰•̹͡ິु•ິू꒱

    ooh, i want to know more


    15 days ago
  • Lovegood_24

    To echo what has been previously said, this is really good. I love how there is a plot twist!


    6 months ago
  • Saki

    I like how the writing keeps its pace. It's so clear and to the point. I also found rhymes within the lines, very nice, though dunno if that was intended, instinctive, or coincidental.


    8 months ago
  • rubywriter2004

    This is really good
    :)


    8 months ago
  • Jae

    wow, this is really sad, and amazingly written at the same time. great work
    :D


    8 months ago
  • Elizabeth Chancey

    Amazing.... beautiful... Heartbreakingly amazing.


    9 months ago
  • RNE

    this is so well written. that last sentence killed me!!


    9 months ago
  • buddingauthor

    Oh wow this is so beautiful yet sad. Great job.


    9 months ago
  • spearmint

    You got the plot twist. This was so beautiful and sad!! The last sentence...


    9 months ago
  • MimiChoudhury

    ;D


    9 months ago
  • xXlunagirlXx

    Awww... I'm getting goosebumps, I really hope this is just a figment of your imagination, or I shall die of asphyxiation.


    9 months ago
  • MimiChoudhury

    Thanks so much all of you . That means a lot. Actually...i planned to gv it a happy ending...but i changed my mind at the last second....thought of gving it a plot twist.


    10 months ago
  • Kahasai

    Oh, so sad, but so well written. To repeat what everyone else has already said.


    10 months ago
  • Ryder

    oh...such a tragedy........;-;


    10 months ago
  • Ursa

    aw so sad:(
    good job.


    10 months ago
  • Quille

    That's really sad :( Very well-written, but heartbreaking.


    10 months ago