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I thought about a cool idea of a semi-functional city and this is the product. Enjoy!
"No one willing to strive for the freedom to utter a word" is an amazing phrase. I think it really captures the stillness and almost hazily dull mood of the city- and although the city seems to be somewhat dull and dreary, asleep in silence, the descriptions certainly aren't.
I would describe it as dull, tired, and passive, due to the fact that no one tries to make a noise. no one really rebels, and without sound, life would be terribly dull. it actually sort of reminds me of one of the places (i don't remember the name) in the phantom tollbooth (it's a really good book- i read it in third grade, but i still love it even now that i'm older)- a combination of two places in the book, actually. there's one place where the city vanished because the people only walked with their heads down and not admiring their surroundings to get places faster, and another where sound has been forbidden. the place w/out sound is pretty rebellious, just silently so (since all the sound has been trapped in the queen's castle and they have none), but the dull, almost lifeless abyss of the vanished city reminds me of how i imagine this city.
i would love to know what it looks like! while the silence is obviously the most important part, it would still be interesting to have some descriptions of it's appearance.
i love the concept here! it's very creative and i especially love the ending, which adds some humor to an otherwise relatively serious piece. well done!