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Please let me know how you understood this piece. I would be happier with peer reviews! I just hope this poem transcends the issue I want to voice.

Less Than the Birds

February 13, 2019


This is a special poem I made, so please let me know your thoughts!

I was rummaging around my consciousness
Trying to analyze places where
I might have misplaced a thought
The permutations of my brain pieces displayed
Visionary consultations from mankind's innate wisdom

As I transition from synapse to synapse,
I heard synopses of youth's vulnerable voices.
The spaces were getting tighter
As the Oxygen was providing me a life worth
Less than what I was taught about its worth

because at one point or another
the voices were getting softer and softer

I was seeking with both eyes closed
For I might as well be apprehended
In this fragile hold to humane service
And a compact grip to egotistic power
A soothing turbulence to the nescient ear

I noticed a gradual decrease
The decibels that turned to negatives
Introduced a signal of lamentation
The squeaking and screeching of
Whimpering terrains of mouth-cuffed sentiments

I was just in for a few moments but
The hairs on my skin stood up for themselves
As if to inform me of an escape plan
Because suffocation was an understatement
I immediately bumped my eyes back open.

I looked up into the heavens
And realized the ethos of a sympathetic ear
I heard the chirping of birds
And witnessed the playing field of devoted eyes
I saw the beauty of human nature.

But then I was reminded
Of the underserved individuals
For none shall remove the purpose of one's mouth
For no human shall be
Served less than the birds.
I made this in dedication to Princetonians and freedom of speech.


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  • Aldrich

    @palindrome, well, i repost pieces that strike me. and, rest assured i won't make money off of that piece of yours I reposted! ;) i won't make money off of anything others made when i can do it to mine. :))) anyway, your mirrored poetry pieces are well made!

    over 1 year ago
  • asteria

    i really love this poem! the imagery is so intruiging, and i'd have to say my favorite lines are: "Because suffocation was an understatement," and "As I transition from synapse to synapse, / I heard synopses of youth's vulnerable voices. " i loved the word play in the latter! brilliant piece :)

    over 1 year ago
  • pencils.and.paper.roses

    *infinite applause* I love this soooo muuuuuch! The lines "I noticed a gradual decrease/
    The decibels that turned to negatives/Introduced a signal of lamentation/The squeaking and screeching of/Whimpering terrains of mouth-cuffed sentiments" is my favorite!

    over 1 year ago
  • Quille

    Wow!! I love this one; very powerfully worded and the message comes through vividly :DD
    Astoundingly awesome!!!!

    over 1 year ago
  • inkandstars

    @Aldrich, I would be honored if you used my piece. Just don't try to make money off it! Tell me how it goes...

    over 1 year ago
  • chethana

    This poem was amazing! I love all the descriptive words and the imagery. The words you used are amazing. Keep up the good work!

    over 1 year ago
  • Aldrich

    @palindrome I will surely wait for your review! Thanks for spending some of your time on reading this piece. I truly appreciate it! Anyway, something is called offensive only when ego has messed with the intent. In short, I would appreciate your review! Thank you so much! :)

    over 1 year ago
  • inkandstars

    I really liked your ending. Great job! This was cool. A review coming your way.... I am kind of a harsh reviewer, but don't be offended please!

    over 1 year ago