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I would tell them this piece was about gay pirates fighting against their odds. This is a story filled with great figurative language, descriptions, and metaphors that paints the reader a vivid picture.
The characters in this piece are given personalities and looks that fit with the plot and essence of a pirate or a time period or pirates.
The greatest strength of this piece is how it avoids giving you striagh forward information-like how the navigator is dead, the pirates are gay, or how they kiss in secret but like it.
Instead of feeding us information about your piece, you described it in amazing ways allowing the reader to picture everything.
I was slightly confused about who the writer was referring to between all the 'he' s, 'him' s, and 'his' s, therefore, I think adding a name would help or always refer to them as Captain or navigator.
Also, when you talked about the navigator, you referred to him as a boy which seemed really young compared to when you described the captain. Age isn't important to this piece and as you read it becomes clear about how they seem around each other's age through interactions, however, the beginning was slightly confusing about this.
Great work! Keep writing!