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Message to Readers
ANY AND ALL FEEDBACK IS WELCOME! This is my second draft and all editing ideas are immensely helpful. Anyway, enjoy!! :P :P
I enjoy seeing new characters added into the story! It's also nice to see more details about the Game unfolding.
Will Joely be mentioned again, or was that just a way for the girls to meet Albany? Are Albany and Cara trustworthy? I also wonder if the girls are allowed to have any contact with their families while they're there.
I'm excited to see where you continue to take this!