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Hi, everyone! Here's my second published piece--first really, unless you count my writing goals. It's sort of a sad piece...but it felt right for me so I delivered. I welcome any reviews and/or comments. Thanks! -Alliyah
The beautiful imagery! You could've written something much simpler, but instead you dove into how the world reacted when she died. Which endeared her to me, too. Also, the way that the beginning is almost a hiccup. As though you're still denying that she's gone, and while you live on, she doesn't, and you feel as though she should be here, too.
Sadness. But this is such a sweet piece. That you would feel all these things makes me want to cry, and helps me to understand what you're going through.
Lovely job!! This just takes my breath away ...
Your descriptions are unique and just ... beautiful.
See? I'm speechless. ;)
Keep up the fabulous work! God bless!