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Message to Readers
ANY AND ALL FEEDBACK IS WELCOME! This is my second draft and revision ideas are immensely helpful. :P Even if you hate it, please tell me!!
I can't believe Lynn will only get grounded for 2 months! However, aside from that, I'm happy that your novel still holds my attention. Still waiting to know what the Game actually IS though!! :)
I'd like to know what makes Mrs. Thomas so averted to the Game. How does she know it's dangerous? Why don't other parents seem to share the same concerns?
I'm enjoying reading your work <3