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"The moonlight coated young woman takes a deep breath and feels the chilled air catch in her throat" I could picture her coat with a splash of silver moonlight as her throat becomes equal parts painful and dry simultaneously. I love how you paint these experiences and breathe life into your character.
At first it was really dark, ominous and gloomy but towards the end I sense a fatigue-laced joy and relief of the craving for a good night's sleep. So it's a very relatable tale with hints of familiarity since all we want at the end of each tiring day is to sleep it off. I love how you encapsulate this message nicely in your beautiful prose.
Nicely done with your surrealistic descriptions! I really enjoyed how you described her beguilering eyes and how they seemed to be really fierce when she was just tired beyond repair. I like how the whole scene appears to be bleak and forlorn to represent her inner-self as exhausted, barely-surviving and in desperate need of a rejuvenation. I have enjoyed your story to the utmost, especially the lovely language used which brings me to her realm as well. Keep writing! :)