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.audrey michelle.

United States

.hi.
.im audrey.
.writing.
.reading.
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.art.
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Message to Readers

positive to my piece "untitled"

check it out...

enjoy :D

title

January 29, 2019

FREE WRITING

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the flames i put you under,
the hate that i gave you,
the way i treated you,
the thing i called you.

or didn't call you...

why would i do that
to you?
what made my mind become
so hate-filled
that i decided to deliver you to
the gates of hell?
why?

i screamed at you.
i cursed at you.
i threw shade at you.

i gave you my all,
but i still did this 
terrible stuff to you.

i didn't even change you...
i created you in the moment,
in the now,
but then i threw you to
the gates of hell
and kept you there.

but i realize that you 
couldn't be there...
i should express my moments...
always stay in the now...
never look back and
live my best life...

that's why i'm going to 
give you a name:
title



 

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7 Comments
  • Jae

    literally, your poems are dope! i just love how much work you put into them, and can't wait to read more!
    :DDDD


    3 months ago
  • .audrey michelle.

    tysm!!!

    love u!!!


    5 months ago
  • Quille

    title :) At first I didn't see the connection to the piece, but now I do, and I think it's fantastic :DD The last stanza is really cool, I like the way it shows moving on by just giving a name :D The word choices in this are very strong and really express the emotion well :DDD
    This is an awesome piece; I really love the line 'i threw shade at you' the metaphor in that is gorgeous!! :DD


    5 months ago
  • .audrey michelle.

    tysm everyone!!!!

    love yall!!!


    6 months ago
  • Opal Drop

    This so wonderful! I love how you accept blame, and how you describe it so perfectly. And in the end, you decided to move on with your life, and we are able to follow the story throughout the poem! This is so beautifully done.


    6 months ago
  • paperbird

    this is so meaningful on several levels. at first i was confused by the title (get it?) but everything was wrapped up neatly--it made perfect sense when i finished. this is such a good poem, an interesting way to show the dynamic in a relationship.


    6 months ago
  • .audrey michelle.

    and its true... i dont look back and edit much (really at all :D), but i hate a lot of the stuff i write


    6 months ago