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omicron7889

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Message to Readers

I, my dear writers. Am pretty sure I have a fever. I also missed an A* on my english mocks by 1%. Maybe that's because I wrote my narrative composition piece in complete rhymes and I don't think the teacher marking was amused. (okay, I thought it was hilarious) Should I publish it here?

All that bad

January 28, 2019

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Why, we all wish for the ‘good old days’
The carefree pranks with goofy school plays
We all wait eternities sprawled out on our beds
And hope that we become young again, in our heads

We wish and we wish to find our younger selves
We wish and we wish to again believe in elves
To dream of Santa Claus and the Tooth Fairy
To find small grazes and the dark scary

We thought our lives back then were so much better
Back when we worried for birthdays we’d get a sweater
Yeah we all rushed to grow up, was that a mistake?
When we look back do we feel a familiar ache?

Of time spent not knowing it would be gone
Now we visualise the past in our never-ending yawns
We’re tired of work and of missing the over
Hoping to go back to the age of four-leaf clovers

So we write odes and poems and stories and laments
Of memories vanished and of forgotten events
It takes us too long to ask the question that nags
Sure, we’ve grown up. But is it all that bad?

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8 Comments
  • omicron7889

    Thank you Christy Wisdom for your kind comment! I'm glad you could relate :)


    6 months ago
  • Christy Wisdom

    Wow, this is a really cool poem that is easy to relate to. I love the rhyme/rhythm scheme, and you have a lot of clever lines in here. Great piece!


    6 months ago
  • omicron7889

    I'm glad this could make you feel something. I too use a lot of my old childhood memories to create stories and poems, and sometimes I will refer back to them. I wanted to end the poem on a question for the reader, whether our present was really as bad as we thought and whether how we feel now is influenced by the golden days of our past.


    6 months ago
  • muppet

    Dang this really was good. It hit me in my emotions too. Nostalgia and childhood influence my writing so much, especially my poetry, because it was the last time I was truly happy. Great great stuff.


    6 months ago
  • omicron7889

    Ahaha thank you!! I've pretty much gone 'eh' at the A now I mean it's still a decent grade so yeah I'm okay with what it is.


    6 months ago
  • Quille

    Disappointed about the A or not, this piece is fantastic; masterfully rhymed :DD


    6 months ago
  • omicron7889

    Yes. My disappointment is immeasurable and my day is ruined


    7 months ago
  • nezi_nes

    *your disappointment of barely tasting the A* on a masterpiece has been felt


    7 months ago