omicron7889

Hong Kong

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I hope you're having a good day :)

(also if you have any work you would like me to review, just drop me a comment on any one of my pieces and I'll happily review away)

Message to Readers

I'm supposed to be doing what. working? studying? I don't know. do I write a poem while sick because I'm only operating on a good 4 hours of sleep because of a fever last night? sure.

sure.

Delete

January 27, 2019

FREE WRITING

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Delete.

Because we’re unsure of what we write
Because we don’t like who we’ve become
Because we find ourselves too boring to care
Because we think what we say is dumb

Delete.

Our own chaotic feelings and our thoughts
To make sure they don’t interfere with the day
We remove them and toss them aside
To make sure they don’t get in our ways

Delete.

Our own hopes for the present and future
Because there’s no chance dreams could ever work
Well, that’s what we tell ourselves repetitively
That it’s nothing but a surrealist mental artwork

Delete. Delete. Delete.

Erase all the secretly wanted compliments
And focus solely and purely on the criticisms
Why? Because we can’t be over prideful
We all need to be the epitome of altruism

We’re told to expunge and destroy our own souls
Crushed by each other to unrecognisable bits
Crushing others unknowingly in an effort to be right
And we wonder why our minds then split

Obliterate, because we fear stepping out of line
The line The Norm has drawn at our twitchy feet
And we box ourselves to fit in a pre-made jigsaw
Only to puzzle at why inside we all feel offbeat

So we delete. Because we’re afraid
So we delete. Because we’re insecure
We extinguish and abolish, efface and eliminate
If only we knew doing the opposite was the true cure

If only we knew how not to delete.

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8 Comments
  • omicron7889

    Thanks! I will :P


    9 months ago
  • 2A,2H and 1D

    Love it! Keep up the amazing work:()


    9 months ago
  • omicron7889

    Yeah society likes to mess with us at times *shrug


    10 months ago
  • nezi_nes

    "Because we can’t be over prideful
    We all need to be the epitome of altruism"- made me think...


    10 months ago
  • omicron7889

    @timtam.9 I'm glad my poem managed to give new perspective :) It's satisfying to know as a writer that our words can affect others, because it gives meaning to our writing

    @Johanna Thank you for your comment! I'm happy that the simplicity here didn't hinder the message. Thanks for letting me know that :)

    @Blotted Ink with a Broken Quill THANK YOUUU


    10 months ago
  • Blotted Ink with a Broken Quill

    Wow. SO good.


    10 months ago
  • Johanna

    Ditto on timtam.9- that was relatable. And it felt so simple yet true- great job!


    10 months ago
  • timtam.9

    This was relatable- and that scares me. It’s a good change of perspective. Thanks.


    10 months ago