acrosstheskysky

United States

she/her
hello! i want a bagel

loser

January 25, 2019

FREE WRITING

10
i wanted to yell
at you
hurl words of hot coal and steel blades with
horrible, rage-fueled strength
(i'm not even sure why)

maybe i thought you were responsible for
the rusty screws twisting in my gut,
the thick molasses seeping through my veins,
the polluted sewage clogging my lungs
(i wasn't thinking straight)

or maybe i thought i could
get rid of it all through this,
some sort of deep cleaning that would
extract the broken glass
(though it never seems to work)

but either way
in the end it's me
whose eyes and cheeks are stained
with saltwater
and i'm the loser
(but there really isn't a winner in this)


 
i edited this a lot and i'm still not 100% happy so feedback would be greatly appreciated!

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6 Comments
  • r|A|i|N

    this is -beautiful-


    over 1 year ago
  • acrosstheskysky

    @paperbird thank you!


    almost 2 years ago
  • paperbird

    everything you write gets to my heart. i love the lines "rusting screws twisting in my gut / the thick molasses seeping through my veins" and idk just all of it... it's so heavy, so powerfully delivered. masterful.


    almost 2 years ago
  • acrosstheskysky

    @ruthh @loveletters thannk youuu :')


    almost 2 years ago
  • loveletterstosappho

    i wasn't emotionally prepared to read this and now i need to write a review because i can't read something so good and just not write a review


    almost 2 years ago
  • Ruthh

    This is such a beautiful piece!! I love all the metaphors


    almost 2 years ago