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paperbird

United States

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written from real-life experiences. i have something called seasonal affective disorder, which causes me to feel depressed & blue in summertime, and much happier on rainy days and during wintertime. so that's what this is about. and feedback is appreciated.

glory in the rain & mourn in the sun

January 22, 2019

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the sun's hands are like soggy iron:
they hold my chin
and their fingers drip with
earthen wax
and long-gone are the days when
i feared the candle on the dinner table
and i hid my face with little hands
to avoid the scream of the fire
but maybe some of that fear is with me still
and that's why i can't stand the
white that explodes the sky
they say the flame is beautiful
but it's whipped me raw
and i've bled
so many times under those
cruel iron hands.

but the sky is hot when the rain comes in
and the gray feels nearly like a blanket
a blanket that cloaks my back
wraps it up like a fetus
and i am alive with raw joy
and i run down the streets and i
can't help but yell into the
empty world as
raindrops crunch under my toes
and trees turn to spurting fountains
and that's why
i mourn it when it stops
it's why
i glory when the
sun goes down.

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4 Comments
  • The Bubbling Pen

    "and i am alive with raw joy
    and i run down the streets and i
    can't help but yell into the
    empty world as
    raindrops crunch under my toes
    and trees turn to spurting fountains"

    I love love love this so much!!! <3


    5 months ago
  • paperbird

    thanks!!


    5 months ago
  • acrosstheskysky

    i looove the imagery in this wOW
    my favorite lines are probably "and their fingers drip with/earthen wax" "they say the flame is beautiful/but it's whipped me raw" "raindrops crunch under my toes/and trees turn to spurting fountains" your writing is just. so. beautiful.


    5 months ago
  • JCWriter

    This is so interesting! As always, amazing imagery. The lines "and that's why i can't stand the / white that explodes the sky" were cool to me because people don't usually use white to describe summer and the sun, especially when comparing it to winter, but it works really well here! And also "raindrops crunch under my toes" is such a cool line. I like the way you describe rainy days in general; I can't exactly relate to your experiences, but I generally prefer gray rainy days to hot sunny ones.


    5 months ago