Some of the rhyming seemed a little forced with clunky sentences or too many syllables. Your description is so lovely and unique and I feel you don't need to make it fit into rhyme if you don't need to -...

As I said before, this was a really good op-ed. However, I think writing op-eds isn't "for you." I feel like you should venture into writing more fictional stories that are based off of real world problems. In that section...

I really loved your text, it was full of love, and I could imagine myself living those moments you described. Keep up the good job!

I really like the last line. Honestly you could make that a writing prompt for a short story!

This hit close to home for me personally which I guess is why I'm reviewing it. I am currently suffering from depression and trying really hard to overcome it, but I understand all the emotions within the first letter. However,...

Love this part as much as the first, possibly more. You're really finding your footing in how you write the story and you'll only go up from there.

I really, really love the concept your working with here. There's really not much to change aside from a small number of punctuation and sentence structure things. Good job!

This was great piece, and I really enjoyed it! Keep writing! Thank you for reading my review, and for sharing your work! I enjoyed it !

As a big LMM fan, (Hamilton, in the Heights, 21 chump street, Moana, you name it), I really appreciated it. Great work!

It's simply amazing!

the tittle does need to be capitalized

I like the details that you provide, those always help bring the story to life. There are a few grammar mistakes but we all have those from time to time.

I suggest tabbing at the beginning of each paragraph and putting a break after each one, for better readability.

Your characters are very well developed! I can see each of them and their interactions.

Overall, great job! This was a really eye-opening, informative essay that I definitely learned a lot from. The subtle pieces of advice you included were true and thoughtful. I love how you included solutions, making the situation seem more hopeful.

*You say the word 'that' a lot. Be careful of run-on sentences, they are very present throughout your piece. Try and add more 'pop' to your piece by not always using 'she' or 'he' when starting a sentence. This is...

I struggled with my weight, too so this really hit home for me. I know that even now there are feelings of guilt and shame so I praise you for making this bold move to share this story. It's not...

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